WALT use the correct structure and language in our writing.
Staying with my brothers and sisters.
On Monday my mum and dad went to
Auckland for my papa's wedding but I wanted to
stay home with my brothers and sisters.
stay home with my brothers and sisters.
First we went to McDonalds for breakfast.
Itś my favourite place to eat. My sisters took me in the car.
Itś my favourite place to eat. My sisters took me in the car.
We waited a long time. I felt bored.
Finally our food was ready and we went up to pay.
Finally our food was ready and we went up to pay.
Then we went home. Our kai looked yummy. It tasted yummy.
After that I was watching the try not to laugh challenge
on youtube. I waited until it was lunchtime. I walked to the dairy.
I brought a pie and a drink. I ate my pie on the way back home.
It was yummy. I made my bed and went to sleep.
I had a amazing day.
on youtube. I waited until it was lunchtime. I walked to the dairy.
I brought a pie and a drink. I ate my pie on the way back home.
It was yummy. I made my bed and went to sleep.
I had a amazing day.
Kia ora, this is room 4.
ReplyDeleteThe part that stood out was when you were telling us all about the yummy food. When I read your post I learnt that you like to describe food as yummy. Next time, you could try using different words to describe food.
Kia ora. This is Simon.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the part when you watched the try not to laugh challenge.
Did you think about using poppy words?
Maybe you could use Finally at the end.
Keep up the good work.
thank you simon for your comment
DeleteKia ora Joeche I like your story.
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